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Nezity (#200107)

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2020-07-12 09:27:56
So I need help with my writing, if you can find any mistake or incorrect wording please tell me :) help a Cycad out will you? I tend to be very action/gore obsessed cause I enjoy writing death scenes so just you know work with me. I know sometimes I tend to place periods and commas wrongly so yeah.


Prompt 1: As a child, I didn't think I'll be able to stand up against my demons. Now, as a adult I was the most feared demon hunter there was," Arith would rather slice through walls then eat whatever that is", One of my "friends" or so I thought they were exclaimed with a scoff, embarrassing to think they all thought I was some robot due to the way I take orders and speak, taking a few steps forward toward them I placed a hand over their shoulder. " Eat what?", My voice shadowed my true concern once my eyes narrowed to whatever creature showed itself," Arith! Levy was just insulting my cooking skills like always", A bright smile from the most skilled combat person I ever met, she was pretty and once I sat down beside the annoying pink haired male who kept nudging me without stopping," Don't eat it, you won't survive not even you're healing powers can save you", Levy tensed as Kuni threw a fork at him, he barely deflected it with his dagger," Stop you two, don't we have a job today?", I asked reaching forward to point at the working job poster," Oh no, Mr.Waltz already took a job- like 3 of them", Kuni shook her head, her long locks weaves through the air as my eyes seemed too distracted to notice Levy again poking me.....


Yes, this was my whole day. Eating, training, eating again the cycle wouldn't stop," Arith, could we one day go on a mission together- just the two of us?", Kuni bright smile stunned me, I couldn't speak for a few seconds I thought I was a baby again babbling out nonsense," Arith....", Her words trailed off as I stood up and grunted," No I prefer working alone", What was I saying, this strange feeling like I just missed my chance at happiness was too strong for me to handle," Oh...but I mean you went on one with Levy who injured himself", Levy blinked scoffing," One time! That demon came out of nowhere!", He protested which didn't faze me as I was frozen, clenching the bar edges my nails creating deep claw like marks," No! I can't risk your life", I shouted stunning everyone around me, Kuni seemed emotionless, unbothered by the fact that her life was worth more then anyone's. Did....did she not want me to protect her," Arith....", I stopped her before growling," No! No! I can't risk your life, you....you can't go with me on any missions- the missions I do are too dangerous! Your not powe-", Kuni was a blur as she leaped from behind the bar and had me pinned down within seconds, her skirt barely had time to keep up as she glared at me," Don't you dare finish that sentence, who are you to tell me that I'm not strong enough- who are you to say that I can't go cause I have no active power? Who are you to decide what I do!", I couldn't bare to listen to how Kuni voice raised, I noticed her clenching canines and her eyes poured hurt onto me as I could feel the pressure she was giving me on my chest," A-ack! I....don't want you to get hurt", I gasped my words," How would you know if me getting hurt would happen? How would you predict what my destiny is?", Kuni released me slowly, I sat up quickly and gasped for air," Kuni....", My words trailed off as she walked away in the dark back room.



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Ace -⃝⃤ She/They (#355723)

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2023-01-17 19:49:26
Hello, do you still need help?



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