Posted by Please rate my lore :)

DIVĀ (#232219)


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Posted on
2023-11-15 14:22:17
Please and thank you! It's been a while since I wrote for fun and today it was the first time in maybe two years.
Please let me know of grammar or spelling errors, style and flow of writing. Feel free to include a gb estimation too.

This is the lore from one of my caves:
Cloud pool and cave of light are surrounded by a thick forest with luscious growth. The forest hosts many varieties of plant life and is an abundant source of herbs with healing properties. It's also the main income of food for the clan. The most common herbivores are deer, rabbits, mice but birds are also in great number. The forest is full to the brim with live. The air is hot, humid and misty. The voices of singing birds and buzzing insects are impossible to miss.
This is the home to most lions of the clan. Many cubs are born and weaned, adolescents explore and adults go on hunts. Lions that live here firmly believe doing good deeds will benefit them and the clan as a whole. That is their own spiritual path.



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Nex (#450965)

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Posted on
2023-11-15 14:31:02
Dude it's pretty good! I don't think the piece abt the herbivores are necessary but that doesn't degrade the whole lore piece, overall 9.5/10




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